Plot..

I'm not very happy with the trailer I've created so far, as it lacks characters for the audience to empathise with and a real convincing plot.
So I've taken the time to properly map out the plot for The Shore so I can work out who I need to film with and how to make this more real. This is what I have so far:


The Shore.
Teaser trailer plot break-down:

Four friends decide to go on a camping trip to the shore and want to film their trip. It starts raining as they are travelling to the location, an early sign that things are to go wrong. The shore is deserted it seems, except for themselves. They start hearing noises, but dismiss it as the rain making sounds around them. The four are all drinking when Katie turns around and sees a figure standing in a field in the distance. She tells the others in a panic but when they all turn around, the figure has disappeared and the others believe Katie was trying to scare them.
Tom goes back to the car to get some blankets when he sees someone is sat in the passenger seat. The figure’s head turns and Tom panics when he sees that their face is covered. He tries to run back towards the group but falls. A pair of feet can be seen as he looks up.
A scream is heard back at the camp where the other three are still drinking. It is getting dark now, and the three decide they need to look for Tom. They make it back to the car where the boot is open but Tom cannot be seen, except for his hat, which is on the muddy ground.